Okay, these are all personal opinion suggestions as a viewer. As an editor, I know that incorporating stuff to make a video better can be a royal pain in the butt. I also know that no matter what you do, somebody won't be satisfied with it. If they don't nitpick your shooting, they will nitpick your choice of crosshairs, equipment, distances shot, shot placement, video quality, audio quality, music choices, etc. etc. etc. Hunt the way you want to hunt. If you are doing videos for others to see (versus personal record), try to incorporate aspects that are pleasing to most of the viewers and don't worry too much about isolated individuals too much. Many of the things I do in my video editing are a product of repeated feedback over time.
1. Music. It is better than abject silence, but maybe didn't seem to fit the situation. I have mostly moved away from music for that very reason. It is hard to find the right pre-created sounds to fit all the various shooting situations. The music you chose was definitely better than the headbanging slasher music some people include is NOT better than abject silence, LOL.
2. You explained some things in the video, which is good. If you are going to have that long of a build up, you might consider other information such as why you are flicking through all the color palettes, other aspect of the shooting situation....just details to help keep the viewer engaged or feel like they have some situational awareness of what you are going through at the time. How much is enough and how much is too much is sometimes difficult to determine. Try experimenting with a bit more. Is it cold? Wet? Windy? Have you been seeing hogs there lately? Are you after a particular boar that has been coming in? Are you hearing other sounds around you? Stuff like that. Questions I get most commonly (hence try to have the information somewhere in the video) are things like weather, wind, distance of the shot, caliber, rifle (if it isn't shown), bullet, optic.
3. Since you don't have sound from the actual event, you might given the view a heads-up that you are about to shoot so that they won't miss the shot. I blinked and missed the shot and had to rewind.
4. When including text on the screen, try not to have the text cover any relevant action (you didn't) and don't have it cover the icons because it is hard to read when it is over the icons. Your text overprinted the REC icon on the low right. You could have moved the text up and not interfered with the central action on the screen.
5. Make the text a different color than what is on your video. You had a lot of white in the background but also made the text white. Readability will improve if the text is a different color or if you can highlight it in some manner to help it stand out.